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Hey, so I don't know how should I start... Hm...
Your writing is awesome and I see you have a really good potential. But you might wanna change how you write the characters' conversation.
Like the first and the second chapter, those chapters has a lot more descriptive conversations than the other chapters. Oh and you might wanna add punctuations too.
And I know you're writing a story because you want people to read it, and people giving feedback for your story that you put a lot of effort in to.
I suggest you to read other people's stories and novels, just to adapt a little bit of their writing style. Maybe find some fresh new ideas.
I really like your writing so I hope you don't stop writing. If people don't give you feedbacks then you'll have to try harder. I mean you are a writer :)
And as for the banner you could ask for someone to make it for you. There are a lot of banner makers in bieberbetas.com.
You shouldn't give up on writing just because you don't get enough feedback in your first story. Try making another story with new unexpected ideas, and if you still doesn't get enough feedback try again. It's easier to say than done, I know that, but you have to try because girl you have a talent! A great one! I hope you don't give up ^.^
Thank You! It means a lot and I'm already ahead of you with their conversations. The ones that i'm going to be putting up are pre written so they'll be like that for a while but they are getting better cause I have been reading more stories than I have. But I really really do appreciate you're feed back!!!
Hey there! You know I just came across your book and realised you have 19 chapters and only 1 review. Thats bloody ridiculous! Im going to start reading it and reviewing at least every chapter. Every author deserves reviews, even if the story isnt the best! You are wasting your time and effort into this story and you deserve to be awarded by so many compliements and reviews! I sound a lil weird and crazy I know but I hope you know what I mean!
I cant wait to start reading this! Sounds good already!
Thanks for writing gorgeous <3
Thank You so much love! I appreciate it! I totally know what you mean and the last chapter was explaining just that. I hope you enjoy the story!!